|Looking for constructive criticism
||[Mar. 18th, 2012|01:13 am]
Yu Gi Oh fanfiction community
I was wondering if anyone could help me with a story I'm currently writing. It's called "Fractured Illusions," and I wanted to know if it's decent.
Summary: Yugi saved the world countless times, traveled to the past, and befriended a dead Pharaoh. Then he woke up.
Spoilers: Happens after the end of the original series, does not include the GX, 5Ds, or Zexal canon.
Warnings: Language, could be classified as alternate universe.
It's here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7327998/1/Fractured_Illusions
I just want to know if the characterization is okay and whether or not the dialogue is awkward.